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Argumentative Essay On Technology Dependency

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With the rapid growth of technology, there has been a debate on how we are using technology in our life. Many people think that we are now abusing modern devices to support for our own life; while others reckon that using technology brings us just good things and make our life easier. According to what I have observed and experienced, I believe that people, nowadays, have been overly dependent on technology.

To begin with, it is not hard to recognize the intergral role of technology in houses. Housewives, nowadays, are no longer "housewives" as itself used to mean. They do almost every task with the assistance of modern machines. They have clothes washed by washing machine instead of doing that by hand as before or they clean dishes just by putting them into a dishwasher. In the past, televisions seemed like the luxurious thing but each family now has at least one or even more than two TV sets in their house. It is now common to catch the image of many children or some adults spending most of their time in front of the screens containing various attractive things.

What is more, workplaces are becoming more and more dependent upon technology. In almost every company, there is an advancedly computerized system which makes tasks much easier and quicker. Most of employees have their own mobile phone or computer so that they could exchange information or documents as soon as they want without leaving their desks. Besides, there are many kinds of machine such as printers, photocopiers .etc that make working as easy as walking. In addition, in term of education, students are now also using too much modern devices for their studying. They do calculations even the most simple using portable calculators. They also take advantage of the Internet to do assignments without many efforts.

On the other hand, many people think that people' abuse of technology just brings good points. It makes our world easier to live as it helps people do all tasks effectively. However, that is not always true. Despite a wide range of benefits from modern technology, we can not inogre bad points it brings. Using modern devices for everything makes people lazier and more passive in life. It causes the creativity of human beings to decrease which is very dangerous for mankind's future.

In conclusion, it is clear that we depend on modern technology too much today. People should carefully rethink about how they should use modern machines for tasks; otherwises, one day, machines would replace the position of human beings to control the world.

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Your essay is pretty good but I think some sentences does not support your ideas well. Take for example, "Besides, there are many kinds of machine such as printers, photocopiers .etc that make working as easy as walking". You don't mention how they abuse them.

"In the past, televisions seemed like the luxurious thing but each family now has at least one or even more than two TV sets in their house" is not relevant. You make it connect it with other sentences.

"support for our own life" -"support our life".

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With the rapid growth of technology, there has been a debate on how we are using technology in our life. Many people think that we are now abusing modern devices to support for our own life; while others reckon that using technology brings us just good things and makes our life easier. According to what I have observed and experienced, I believe that people, nowadays, have been overly dependent on technology.

To begin with, it is not hard to realise the intergral role of technology in houses. Housewives, nowadays, are no longer "housewives" as itself used to mean. They do almost every task with the assistance of modern machines. They have clothes washed by washing machine instead of doing that by hand as before or they clean dishes just by putting them into a dishwasher. In the past, televisions seemed like the luxurious thing but each family now has at least one or even more than two TV sets in their house. It is now common to catch the image of many children or some adults spending most of their time in front of the screens containing various attractive things.

What is more, workplaces are becoming more and more dependent upon technology. In almost every company, there is an advancedly computerized system which makes tasks much easier and quicker. Most of employees have their own mobile phone or computer so that they can exchange information or documents as soon as they want without leaving their desks. Besides, there are many kinds of machine such as printers, photocopiers .etc that make working as easy as walking. In addition, in term of education, students are now also using too much modern devices for their studying. They do calculations even the most simple using portable calculators. (you should rewrite this sentence) They also take advantage of the Internet to do assignments without many efforts.

On the other hand, many people think that people' abuse of technology just brings good points. It makes our world easier to live as it helps people do all tasks effectively. However, that is not always true. Despite a wide range of benefits from modern technology, we can not inogre bad points it brings. Using modern devices for everything makes people lazier and more passive in life. It causes the creativity of human beings to decrease which is very dangerous for mankind's future. (you should reorganize this paragraph)

In conclusion, it is clear that we depend on modern technology too much today. People should carefully rethink about how they should use modern machines for tasks; otherwises, one day, machines would replace the position of human beings to control the world

With the rapid growth of technology, there has been a debate on how we are using technology in our life.


.... You can improve this better;
Rapid advancement of technology has made a great impact on peoples' life-styles. ....Now you can move on to the second line :)

According to what I have observed and experienced, I believe that people, nowadays, have been overly dependent on technology.


... good :)

Housewives, nowadays, are no longer "housewives" as itself used to mean.


Housewives nowadays are not any longer the ones to what that this term used to refer in previous eras. ... hmmmmm...nice idea :D
Good essay; good ideas+good structure + good vocabulary :)
Good Luck!

Hi,
Try to make a balance in your supporting and opposing views. Though you conclude that "people are overly dependent on technology" the point supporting are much less.

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Personally, I didn’t think that people were overly dependent on technology until I saw a photo on Google images. It was a photo of people on a subway station platform. Featured were people standing up and sitting down waiting for the next subway train. Every single person on the picture was looking down at their mobile phone, and the caption on the image said, “2014 Zombies.” This image stuck a cord with me, and suddenly I started to notice just how overly dependent we are on technology.

Now I notice how dependant we are on technology on a daily basis. I saw an episode of South Park a few years ago where the Internet goes down. The episode is called “Over logging” and it shows a world without the Internet. It shows in a comical way about how over dependant we are on the Internet, for everything from news reports to contacting people at work. It exaggerated the point for comic effect, but the fact that people couldn’t find out why the Internet went down because they get their news from the Internet was a very good point.

People use their phone and the Internet these days for everything from paying their bills to finding the nearest gas station. Take away these luxuries and people will have a hard time adjusting back to buying everything from retail outlets and having to go to registered businesses to pay their bills, or worse yet, having to mail a check to the billing companies.

Transport is another example of how we have become overly dependent on technology. People use cars and public transport to get to work. As a result, commercial and industrial sectors are much bigger and residential structures are further away. The availability of transport has pushed housing so far from peoples’ places of work that people are forced to rely on technology such as cars and public transport in order to get to work.

Technology has changed the dynamic in developed world homes. Women are able to work, partially because of the women’s rights movement, and partially because of technology. If it were not for technology, then at least one person would have to stay home to help care for the kids and fix the house, but now we may have a washing machine do all the work so that someone doesn’t have to spend hours hand washing, and a TV and games console means kids do not need watching because they can entertain themselves.

Conclusion

The use of technology has manufactured our dependence on it. The fact that people use the Internet so much has made communication via the mail and even via the phone a lot less common and it has consequently led to it being used less and less. The overuse of the Internet has made it so that people do not have to go to retail outlets. The use of transportation other than walking a cycling has led to homes being further away from work so that people are forced to use cars or public transport. By using technology, people are having alternative options removed from them. People are forced to use technology because it is popular, ergo alternate methods were removed and choices were limited/restricted. All of this has lead to a dependence on technology.

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